Incubus versus Chaplain

This is a ball point pen drawing of a duel between a Dark Eldar Incubus and Space Marine Chaplain..... I know there are some areas that might seem a bit off, but they'd be fixed (hopefully) when I do a colored version of it using my PS5 and Painter on OS9..... Also included is a short story describing the duel, so please critique both the story and the drawing.... s woul encourage me to work on the colored one fast, so...... (Was that subtle or what? And if you are not familiar with Warhammer 40k, it's more likely for you to be a female or had not been introduced to the darker side of the NERD world.......) "Nerds are smart." -Milhouse-



As Chaplain Nunez of the Silver Skulls were suppressing the raiding forces of those foul Dark Eldars, he noticed there were the leader of the enemy not too far from him. With those pesky pirates having trouble to contain the finest warriors the Emperor had in his disposal, the dark leader of the enemy was barking out orders to his warriors, whilst disposing quite a few brave veterans of the Emperor. Realizing that taking care of the enemy leader would be the only way to get rid of this raiding forces, Captain Nunez made haste to get himself near the dreaded Archon. But before he could get within the shooting distance to the Archon, one of his bodyguard stopped the Chaplain in his tracks. Armed with pitch black armor, and his filthy armor decorated with the heads of his fallen foes, the Incubus stood tall whilst blocking Nunez, with his mighty spear held high. Being faced by a worthy foe, the proud leader of the Silver Skulls charged up the power fist to prepare himself for the battle. But he did not know he would be facing the whole Incubi Squad, who surrounded him as he lunged his blow against the enemy.
But Emperor denied him, as the agile Incubus swiftly dodged the deadly blow and charged toward the unfortunate Chaplain. Nunez felt the cold edge of the enemy's spear piercing through the chest plate, as he heard a ghastly voice: "Foolish human..... dare to strike the Incubi........" As the Incubus gave a quick twist upon the hilt, the poor Space Marine's soul was captured by the Archon, much to his delight.